It’s a very nice song, well written. I too thought maybe the full-stop thing repeated too many times in the first section. Bass sounds awesome! Needs a better ending –
My big issue is that although the singing itself is superb, the vocal recording sounds really icky – distortion in the signal, EQ sounds unnatural. Not sure what to advise… Are the recording levels too hot? And was it then sent into some plug-in, like compression, at too hot a level?