I love the vocals! cool breakdown at 2:15. I think after that another keyboard sound or maybe add a Jon Lord style B3 to enhance and build track maybe that would give it a more powerful dark rock edge.
The hook is good, I wonder if you could expand the the story there a little?
Another Lonely Night We gotta Make it Right,
Another Lonely Night We gotta Make it Right then
Another Lonely Night, BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH,
Another Lonely Night, BLAH BLAH BLAH BLAH
Just another Blah Blah thought hope you don’t mind it’s a good track!!!