Hi Kevin, singing great, as always. I’ll be honest, I am not very happy with the drums when they come in at 1:08. They aren’t working. Just a simple kick and a snare. Also, there are real problems in the bass, starting at 2:47, all the way through until 4:14. Wrong notes. You need to check it out.
The song itself presents interesting chord changes, and that’s probably more important than the mix comments I make. I think it’s great if you stretch your harmonic vocabulary.
The overall mix is too quiet. I listened to Sherz’s mix of your earlier song, and although I wasn’t sure what I liked better (which was why I didn’t comment despite listening about 10 times), Ian certainly got loudness right. By no means am I in favor of escalating loudness wars, but you need to get to the minimum, and Ian obviously knows how to do that. You have Ozone per your signature, so you have all the tools you need!