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short piece of chill and mandolin

Post by Masoomi » Tue May 15, 2018 9:44 am

piece name: piano comfort
length: 2:16

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Re: short piece of chill and mandolin

Post by Masoomi » Wed May 16, 2018 4:03 pm

constructive feedback would be greatly appreciated :)

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Re: short piece of chill and mandolin

Post by Early21 » Sun May 20, 2018 3:35 am

Hey Masoomi, keep them coming! Thanks for sharing. Very nice little piece. I'd say, move off the two chords into a new section, going wherever it needs to go to solidify the ideas so far.
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Re: short piece of chill and mandolin

Post by Masoomi » Tue May 22, 2018 2:19 am

Early21 wrote:
Sun May 20, 2018 3:35 am
Hey Masoomi, keep them coming! Thanks for sharing. Very nice little piece. I'd say, move off the two chords into a new section, going wherever it needs to go to solidify the ideas so far.
Hey,
you mean the harp part is repetitive? I guess I could work on variations to make it better. thanks a lot

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Re: short piece of chill and mandolin

Post by CUBASE6_USER » Tue May 22, 2018 4:22 pm

Since you are asking for some criticism,....... to me .... it sounds a little mechanical, lacking complexity and allure...
it's the harp that is a little too plain/basic.
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Re: short piece of chill and mandolin

Post by Masoomi » Tue May 22, 2018 11:53 pm

CUBASE6_USER wrote:
Tue May 22, 2018 4:22 pm
Since you are asking for some criticism,....... to me .... it sounds a little mechanical, lacking complexity and allure...
it's the harp that is a little too plain/basic.
hey,
it's great to know your point of view... I'll try to fix that about it.
thanks

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Re: short piece of chill and mandolin

Post by Early21 » Wed May 23, 2018 4:01 am

Yes, I might say that the harp is repetitive, but I really mean that as a musical composition, it's just C Major and D Minor, and I'm suggesting you could expand on it with some change of direction, to make it longer.
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Re: short piece of chill and mandolin

Post by Masoomi » Wed May 23, 2018 5:31 pm

Early21 wrote:
Wed May 23, 2018 4:01 am
Yes, I might say that the harp is repetitive, but I really mean that as a musical composition, it's just C Major and D Minor, and I'm suggesting you could expand on it with some change of direction, to make it longer.
Thank you for elaborating further mate

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